Sample Essay – Topic: Studying abroad

Sau đây là bài viết đã đoạt giải 3 trong cuộc thi “Write & Correct Essay” do VIC tổ chức, công ty du học Vietint tài trợ. Bài viết đã được Thanh Xù Jr. và Bùi Hải Anh sửa các lỗi ngữ pháp với 1 số nhận xét chung ở cuối bài. 

Topic: Nowadays, many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries. While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that the number of overseas students is increasing dramatically because of the rapid pace of globalization. In my point of view, the students can get many more opportunities from taking a trip to study than drawbacks.

It is believed that studying overseas is a precious chance for any person, particularly for students coming from developing countries. Not only can they broaden the horizon and get more advanced knowledge from all over the world but they can also get Internationally recognised qualifications that will help them to enhance their employment opportunities. Moreover, it is an occasion to learn international working styles and to improve language proficiency. In addition, students will be able to stand on their own feet while taking part in overseas courses.

Nevertheless, living and studying in a country that is different from the homeland in culture, language and custom is very difficult, especially at the first stage of the course. Learners certainly go through many troubles such as culture shock, ineffective communication and even issues relating to high accommodation expenses. In addition, they can be homesick which probably affects their study results.

In my perspective, I am convinced that when deciding to take a trip to study, the learners should prepare carefully how to cope with changes. Once they overcome the first difficulties, they will be able to take full advantage of studying in foreign countries.

In summary, the benefits of studying abroad far outweigh the adverse effects.

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Tác giả: Nguyễn Ngọc Đoan Trang

Nhận xét: Nhìn chung, bài viết đạt yêu cầu đề bài khi nêu được cả advantages và disadvantages, cấu trúc câu đa dạng, trình bày rõ ràng dễ hiểu.  Tuy nhiên cần chú ý các lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ như mạo từ, diễn đạt cần súc tích hơn và lựa chọn từ ngữ academic hơn. Bài viết này còn thiếu ví dụ cụ thể. Chẳng hạn ở đoạn 3, bạn có thể đưa ra 1 ví dụ về culture shock. 

Mong nhận được thêm nhận xét của các bạn. 

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