Sample Essay – Problems & Solutions

Topic: In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the countryside. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced?

It goes without saying that the 21st century is witnessing a number of positive changes in terms of economy. In many countries, this has led to the increasing gap between the urban dwellers and rural ones. In my opinion, several problems have arisen from this phenomenon, however there are also many solutions to tackle these.

First of all, the imbalance between the living standard in cities and the countryside has negative impacts on both areas. With regard to metropolis, it appeals to more countrymen to migrate, which results in many adverse consequences. For instance, there is a limit to how many people a major city can accommodate. After that, the city is overloaded, a high population density will erode the quality of life in general by creating pollution or increasing unemployment and crime. Another drawback of the considerable gap between the urban and the rural is that it hinders the development of countryside. It is undeniable that with an increasing number of adults migrating to cities, rural depopulation leads to slower progress of harvesting as well as producing.

In order to solve this problem, I believe that government should bridge the gap between urban citizens and rural ones. To be more specific, because the root cause is the lack of job opportunities, the state should transfer factors or plants to the suburbs and rural areas or invest in constructing more state-­of-­the-­art facilities there. In addition, schools hospitals and entertainment places also need to be taken into account in the hope of comprehensive development throughout the countries.

In conclusion, although there are several pressing issues related to the substantial discrepancy between the standard of living in cities and the countryside, these measures above can solve these problems in the foreseeable future.

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Nhận xét:

  • Kỹ năng paraphrase tốt. 
  • Cấu trúc liền mạch, liên kết chặt chẽ. 
  • Từ vựng đa dạng, phong phú. Tuy nhiên lưu ý một số chỗ còn luộm thuộm (tức có thể làm cho ngắn gọn lại). Ví dụ trước đó bạn đã viết: To be more specific, because the root cause is the lack of job opportunities, the state should distribute many organizations in suburbs and rural areas or pour a great deal of money into constructing more state-of-­the-­art facilities there. Cụm “pour a great deal of money into” đã được sử thành “invest in” để văn phong trong sách, ngắn gọn và hiệu quả. Các bạn nên lưu ý không phải cứ dài là tốt, là academic mà đôi khi như vậy chứng tỏ chúng ta thiếu từ vựng để diễn đạt ngắn gọn. Cùng câu này, cụm từ “state-of-the-art” được xem là informal, chỉ nên dùng trong văn nói. 
  • Bài thiếu ví dụ cụ thể nên không đạt được điểm cao trong phần “Task Response”

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